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Quinn
Posted: Oct 21 2001, 08:59 PM
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I don't like you,
empty-soul girl,
in your dark-ribboned raver camoflauge:
out in the hills,
beatiful people don't rave --
would you wear hiking boots, jeans,
and black-and-grey plaid?

And your interest in Ping:
do you need,
like a villian
(all shiny and new)
a loyal head honcho?

Or does some twisted attraction
draw you to beauty
on which you can't feed?

I don't like you,
but if you keep making rarely-opened eyes at Piro,
and having your new robot friend interfere,
I think we'll get along splendidly.

But if you feed on Kimiko...
I'll have Father Vasquez turn you.

-_Quinn

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Posted: Oct 21 2001, 09:04 PM
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So it's six days early (Kimiko's verse thread being posted on 27 September), but I didn't think anyone would mind.

It's also not my best work*, but Miho's a little mysterious for me to do much with... if someone could point out a few strips they find particularly important about her/her background -- and why -- I'd appreciate it.

-_Quinn

* But it's the best I've been able to come up with, and the Kimiko thread looks like it's petered out, so I figured better sooner than maybe better.

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Posted: Oct 21 2001, 09:05 PM
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Beautiful Fire, she's called.
Has ever a name been so fitting?
Her dark loveliness hides an even darker heart.
And yet, when she smiles,
The entire world stops to stare.

Is her joy genuine?
Can one such as her truly be happy?
Or is it yet more camouflage,
A mask, hiding her true intentions?

I suppose, as they say,
Some things are not meant to be known.

>Shrug< Not ENTIRELY horrible. Prose is more my thing, but, hey, nothing wrong with trying new stuff.

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Glump
Posted: Oct 21 2001, 10:23 PM
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It just so happens that a few days ago I spontaneously composed an homage to Miho, included below. Be warned that it is rather abstract, and indeed exists completely on an emotional reality as opposed to literal...


She liked my tears
Liked the taste of them
Liked the way they intermingled with her own
She would touch my hair from across the room
And fail to smile
And apologize
For she didn't really know what her role was in all this

And the time I swore to free her
And found that she herself held the key
And I couldn't find my way out

She has a plan in which
She is an unwitting pawn
And freedom is death
And neither would stop her
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Quinn
Posted: Oct 21 2001, 10:43 PM
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Two scary thoughts: what happens when her high school's bishie tries to pick up Miho? Tries to pick up Ping? (What happens if said bishie actually is a lot more like Kuno, who 'loves them both'?)

Maybe I should go to bed.

-_Quinn

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Posted: Oct 22 2001, 02:43 AM
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quote:
Originally posted by Quinn:
Two scary thoughts: what happens when her high school's bishie tries to pick up Miho? Tries to pick up Ping? (What happens if said bishie actually is a lot more like Kuno, who 'loves them both'?)

Hey! You're right! I think this strip needs more TWISTINESS! Shiritsu Daitou needs some guy to attempt to go out with all the female main characters of the correct age, one or more at a time! Yuki! Miho! Ping! Bwahahahah! Someone must notify Mr. Gallagher immediately!

(Those who do not understand the phrase twistiness: It is used to refer to complicated relationship structures. See Avalon High, at www.avalonhigh.com )

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Glump
Posted: Oct 22 2001, 06:37 PM
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What? The thread will die with just that? I expected we'd at least get a smurd...
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Posted: Oct 23 2001, 05:48 AM
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My muse is currently riding on RaZ's back, resisting the urge to cry "DEATH TO HARKONNENS!" I seem incapable of producing anything serious at the moment.

And yes, I too am wondering where smurd-san is. He's probably on stanza 347 of a 500 verse epic extolling the praises of the Darkly Cute one.

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Posted: Oct 23 2001, 06:06 AM
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quote:
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What? The thread will die with just that? I expected we'd at least get a smurd...

No way, fella, but I have to finish the Coleridge parody first. (Job, kids, dirty dishes, and all that stuff that Dylan Thomas never had to contend with.)

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Quinn
Posted: Oct 23 2001, 07:46 AM
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Like Phaedrus, my muse is busily spinning out tales of glory, combat, and background material in the form of entries in the Gamer's Glossary. Maybe Piro will give us something to work with this week -- certainly, the Darkly Cute one should be in the Halloween special, right?

-_Quinn

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 06:40 AM
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[The Artistry Encouragement Agency.]

_Quinn's muse was concerned. Not by his prosaic violence in the FanWar thread; and not by his lamentable tendency to switch tenses; but by Phaedrus' superior haiku output. With the Miho (Verse) thread stalled, _Quinn had no chance to become the Schwing... and _Quinn's muse had no chance at promotion. Something had to be done... her client's strength was free verse, a perfect foil for haiku, but perhaps... indeed, in the style of the methane-propelled 'zilla, something else was needed. She rubbed her hands together gleefully -- and checking to make sure _Quinn's CEA caseworker was busy -- set to work in his brain.

from The Book of Dead Wombats

"It is this author's greatest pleasure
to pound dead wombats, stretch and measure:
for a fine stew they make,
and a great pie they bake,
and with sauce, they're truly a treasure."

-- Introductions, 1:1

"To really enjoy a wombat for three,
avoid cheeses, especially brie:
the only thing rotten
should be wombat, ill-gotten,
cooked on leaves from a well-oiled tree."

-- Admonitions, 2:3

_Quinn's muse looked up from her work at the sudden arrival of the CEA caseworker, who spoke disapprovingly: "Shoo. He has work to do."

-_Quinn

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 08:43 AM
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Ok, ok, I am now sufficiently shamed/bribed to make an offering, while we wait for smurd to rime himself out of that wedding reception, with honor, if not sobriety.

Give me a few minutes.

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 08:56 AM
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Ambiguity
is your rightful staff and shield.
Keep the men guessing!
A puzzled fanboy is a
reed that will bend to your will.

-- Strategies 9:1-5

Historical note: this verse from the Necrowombicon was apparently translated literally from the much older Unaussprechlichen Mdchen. It seems to have lost something in the translation; I'm not entirely sure I understand the meaning.

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 09:40 AM
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The eyes are mirror
To the soul : the wombancer
Knows this potency
her eyes, her weappone - her eyes
her weaknesse - the veiler's arte

- Secrets 3:19

(In his infamous translation (circa 1337 A.D.) of the Necrowombicon, the mad prophet Yamiko scrawled many additions to the great work that have since become generally accepted by the occult community, despite (or perhaps due to) their particularly pronounced tendency to the cryptic. In a potentially futile attempt to increase clarity, this edition has italicized Yamiko's revisions wherever they could be identified.)

[Author's note - This is way too much fun. :-) ]

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 10:42 AM
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Be not afraid to
display your secret beauty.
A glimpse. Tantalize.
Fanservice is the flame which
melts the putty of men's minds.

-- Strategies 4:1-5

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 10:44 AM
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[/me applauds Garran. (Sorry, Phaedrus, I don't want to piss off my muse. ) I like... 'the mad prophet Yamiko'... Tasty... ]

"
With a black ribbon bound,
holding up, or letting down:
she will not wear a crown,
but by these signs be found.

Know ye this book,
lest your soul by her be took:
prepare the wombat feast,
all of ye, from most to least.
"

-- from Yamiko's Translator's Notes

-_Quinn

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 10:51 AM
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Strategies is a complex work. It is difficult to determine the proper form for a verse: haiku, tanka, or limerick? Some verses have clearly been altered from their original, but if to remove, alter, or insert is mostly unknown. Yamiko's edition, the most complete known, may include attempts to correct past (or future!) alterations, leading to more confusion. Consider the following fragment from Strategies 1:30...

Know your enemy:
test him with a new minion
to learn both their strengths.

-_Quinn

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 11:14 PM
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Do not brag about
the size of your sword until
you may unsheathe it.
Past success, Doom. Humble men
Quake not in fear of reviews.

--Admonitions 7:4-8

Dabbling in occult lore is perilous; a little knowledge is a dangerous thing. John Romero obviously never read this far.

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 12:48 PM
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The seeds of your might
Are borne in the fertile minds
Of those who fear you ;
Be as a feather on the
Winds of perception, unfixed

- Strategies 2:18

(Note: While it is believed that Yamiko had some influence on the above verse, this passage is missing from all comfirmed fragments we have of the original text, leaving it very difficult to determine, in this case, what is or is not his authorship. We leave it to the interpretation of the reader.)

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 12:53 PM
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When cross-dressing yourself online,
don't assume any gender is fine.
That bishounen over there,
ribbon twined in his hair,
Might be female, though showing no sign.

--Admonitions 4:22-26

Yamiko's translation work was notoriously biased. He seemed to dislike haiku, and often appended commentary lines or additional syllables to convert the original poem into an alternate verse form. In this process, he sometimes changed the message entirely.

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 01:06 PM
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Out Of Necrowombicon: I had some indecision regarding numbering, last post; in the end, I decided to stick with my previous method, rather and Phaedrus', for personal consistancy. Different scholars use different notations - some identifying every line cited, others only the first.

Just in case anyone is confused as to why it kept changing back and forth for a while. happy.gif;;

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 02:15 PM
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I'm working off the infamous 1932 "Sans-Hemp" edition of Crowley's English Necrowombicon translation, the one with the typo on the frontspiece:

Abandon rope, all ye who enter here.

I presume you're working from a different printing?

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 02:27 PM
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Originally posted by Phaedrus:
I'm working off the infamous 1932 "Sans-Hemp" edition of Crowley's English Necrowombicon translation, the one with the typo on the frontspiece:

Abandon rope, all ye who enter here.

I presume you're working from a different printing?


(There's a witty reply to this lurking somewhere within someone who isn't so distracted by these convulsions of horrified laughter.)

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 02:59 PM
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quote:
Originally posted by Garran:
(There's a witty reply to this lurking somewhere within someone who isn't so distracted by these convulsions of horrified laughter.)

And as soon as I can stop laughing, re-attach my ass, and get back on my chair, I'll be sure to find that person, whoever s/he is.

-_Quinn

PS: This is looking more like what a Character (Verse) thread should. Thanks, guys.

PPS: first thought: The '[the] Wok Will Set you Free' version from China, as translated by Sun Tzu, and again into German by an unknown scientist working at Castle Wolfenstein?

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Posted: Oct 25 2001, 06:35 PM
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Nnnnnnng aaaaaaaaaaah dammit, okay, I give up, I can't resist! Such good verse about my favorite spooky chick! Coleridge can wait, I just can't stand idly by!

The Warrior thinks himself unbeatable,
But his type is never uncheatable:
Hes resistant to Cuts and Sprains
But lacking in Sense and Brains,
Thus his Pride makes him defeatable.

He's easily fooled by feminine Wiles,
Readily seduced by subtle Half-Smiles:
At your Gesture he will follow,
All his Purpose rendered hollow,
Thus his Submission you plot meanwhiles.

Though his bodily Powers be at their Peak,
Strong drink is Refuge that hell seek
Whilst he waits for your Return
Once to your Boudoir you adjourn,
Thus his Attraction makes him weak.

He drinks, and his Speech becomes bombastic,
He drinks, and his Will becomes elastic.
With dawn hes hungover and tired,
Remembers naught of what transpired,
Thus his Impression, an evening fantastic.

--Libations 93:1-20


*sigh* It's not up to the standards of the present company, gomen. Forgive me, Im sober and I have a terrible headache. This thread was a great idea and beautifully executed, all yall.

Ive made up my mind Im gonna quit this data-janitor crap, Im gonna sell all my stuff and move back to Hawaii and be a full-time poetaster. Days, sit on the beach and watch the clouds being pushed over the Pacific by the trade winds; nights, drink Ozeki and write rhymes. All I need is a lanai (windows optional) and an Internet connection. And Ozeki.

Hey, all you Church of Miho fans: dig the soundtrack at
this Web site; it might take a while to load but it's worth it. Add this to the Church of Miho graphic: imagine the possibilities!

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